Loriesquare

Go Drass, go! You must win... again! XD

I'm having problems with the theme too (same as last time). I think I'll just start the project and make up a bunch of random things on the way... Better than nothing.

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I'll say the same thing. XD (@Minerva if anyone ninja's me)

It's... both?
Therefore, it is not black, but it can be considered black.

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For me, I see it as a really dark pink (or a purple-ish thing)
Or pink hair, but within a shade (light didn't reach it)

So my final answer is... is... ugh... X_X

its not black but can be considered black but maybe it's more of a not-black because i have doubts about it being completely black?

I guess I'll vote not-black, because I see a very dark pink color, so I can't really say it is truly "black".

It is quite dark, though.

I'll be going for Gothic, too.

It's actually great! I didn't get bored watching it. It caught my interest the whole time it was on.

The only grammatical mistake I saw was near the end, "Why would you do this to the them?"

And the beginning with the crystal thingy, I think the wait duration until the text starts rolling is a bit too long.

Although you may be just waiting for the music to kick in.

Speaking of the music, the BGM is amazing.

When you were fighting, I was screaming "USE YOUR ABILITIES!!" XD

I guess there's none yet or you don't have any but nevertheless, it was really good.

Indeed, it seems that I'm also an INFP. XD

Represent!

An important note on editing though, that I should have mentioned in the original post, is to remember to resist the urge to edit, simply to edit. We all have limited time. Unless something is actually incorrect, or truly sounds bad, it's often not worth the time to change it (and besides, you might end up with something worse).

Well said.

I think that's also the reason why some projects don't get released, it's because they try to edit everything to "perfection", and they run out of time.  (I'm guilty of that, back then I couldn't get past making the damn intro)

I love how everything is 1. XD

I agree with the "flow" thing. You rearrange the same words in a sentence and it somehow sounds better!

(Unless you rearranged them in a bad way )

Or even rearranging whole sentences in the dialogue box, the order is important.

And when you read it aloud and you think it sounds off, it probably is.

Sometimes, I do use commas a lot, too,

And sometimes, I think, they're waaay too many, as if it was wrong, lol.

This is pretty helpful, but I'm a bit too lazy to put everything on a doc X_X

Usually, you'd just occasionally play-test the whole game over and over (to test the game as a whole) and you might run into a mistake you didn't see the first time. That's what happens to me most of the time.

Something off-topic (maybe):

Perhaps you can say something about the case of "writing something then after some time it sounds/looks horrible to you even though it was completely fine the moment you wrote it"?