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I started to make a game called Venus: Restoration that takes place in the future several thousand years after Earth became unstable. The only problem is I am having an extremely hard time coming up with the intro of how it became humanity's new home that others will not question. This is all I can think of right now and I really need some feedback on it. I am so frustrated that I am about to cry even though I shouldn't. I am very sorry if this post doesn't belong here. I don't know where else to put it. Venus: Restoration By Megan Byrd(RoseGuardian) -How Venus became humanity’s new home- In the year 3897 A.D. strange things started to happen to Earth. Storms became wild, lakes, and even oceans began to dry up. No one knew what was causing these strange events. One day however a mysterious man appeared to the world. Many people said to him; “Who are you, God?†The man laughed and said; “No, I am Damon God of Destruction and it’s time for you all you mortal fools to bow down to me!†No one would listen to him so he used his power to dry lakes, oceans and kill crops and animals. There was barely any food and water. The people of Earth prayed for all this to stop. Then finally on a day where everything seemed hopeless another man appeared. He was known as many things, but to the people he became known as The Creator of all things. He knew the people of Earth couldn’t stop Damon, so he fought against himself and trapped him with the Earth. However after the battle Earth became unstable so The Creator chose to give his people another chance and made Venus livable. He then teleported the survivors there and recreated the oceans, lakes, plants and animals Earth once had. Several thousand years have passed since then and no one on Venus truly knows that story of Earth was true or just myth. Many stories of Earth are now only mentioned in books. No true history of its existence was recorded. It was long forgotten by time itself. I really hope you guys and girls can help me come up with either a better intro or how to make it sound better so no one will question it.

So, I have been writing the storyline of my game Sol Et Luna (soon to be, still planning) and this is where I stopped: Story: In the beginning, Theos entrusted the world to his two beloved sons, Abel and Cain. Abel tended the days, bearing light, hope and nurture to the world while Cain tended the night sky, to where he brought rest, happiness, content and love to mankind. Theos ordered each of them to present whatever good happens to their work, and so they did. Abel offered the crops, the fields and the beautiful places illuminated during the day to his father. Cain presented hundreds and thousands of good things happening during the night, for at night, there was rest and end to humanity’s all day work, struggle or blood and sweat to live. Cain said to his brother: “I am better than you, for what have you offered to father but crops and fields? Those shall die without my morning dew, the people will die without rest, and too much light, shall all die.†Abel kept silent and offered what he has to his father and so did Cain. But Theos never appreciated Cain’s work, nor have ever once praised him. The silent Abel got the praises and all compliments, which angered Cain. When Abel was about to set and leave, Cain took his morning star and murdered his brother. The blood of Abel cried to Theos and reached Shamayim, the abode of the god Theos. When Theos heard his murdered son’s cries, he punished Cain, disowned him and told him to leave away his mark. He was caged for all eternity to the depths of Sheol, while the grave of Abel was placed in the mountain of Zion. In his sadness, Theos blessed the days and gave it to humanity, while the acts of Cain brought over his evil heart and created different monsters that roam at night. Thousands of years passed, a legend was passed over humanity that whosoever climbs Zion, shall be given the secrets of life and miracles, which the humans called the Methuselah. Daniel and his friends are abandoned by their parents at an early age. They were not given love and have been forgotten, thus, staying at the Charity House until they reached sixteen. However, when visions started bothering Daniel, he knew that a change on his abandoned life is about to come. Monsters are now attacking the humanity and evil thrones to the world. Who are the Methusalah? Do they exist? Did Theos also abandon humanity? Mechanics: Style Mapping: Pixel Render, Parallax Mapping, Tileset (Probably DS or High Fantasy) Battle System: Default Battle System using a custom battle engine I created myself through scripts Music: Outsourced I am also planning to insert some mini games, but what I want is what you can say about the game story or a feedback at the preview. Thanks

I was taking some thought on tackling my first mythology based game to be created on RMVXA. I wrote down a few conflicts that might be the cause of the whole game's story and the development of the characters. I am however, still on the thought of revising this idea, so story writers who are more capable than me of thinking of a good and better conflict, please give your honest feedbacks and critiques. Origin: This is the origin of the game story's creation, taken from the Philippine Mythology: Thousands of years ago, there was no land, sun, moon, or stars, and the world was only a great sea of water, above which stretched the sky. The water was the kingdom of the god Maguayan, and the sky was ruled by the great god, Kaptan. Maguayan had a daughter called Lidagat, the sea, and Kaptan had a son known as Lihangin, the wind. The gods agreed to the marriage of their children, so the sea became the bride of the wind. A daughter and three sons were born to them. The sons were called Likalibutan, Liadlao, and Libulan, and the daughter received the name of Lisuga. Main Conflict: When Asuang (The evil god who always try to steal the sacred fire of Mount Mayon from his brother, Gugurang. Addressed sometimes as Asuang, he dwells mainly inside Mount Malinao. As an evil god, he would cause the people to suffer misfortunes and commit sins.) finally stole the fire of Mount Mayon from his brother Gugurang after slaying him on the time of his weakness, Gugurang, on his final breath, created a Memory Ball where his memories are stored and transferred it somewhere on the mountains. The world falls into turmoil when Asuang went down to the land and taught people how to use fire and light, and many people became greedy, evil, and the rulers of each Puod (or in English, Kingdom) fell into war. Guided by the mercy of the gods, each Elemental Gods and Goddesses promised to lend their powers to for the worthy 'successors' in return of returning the stolen Fire of Mount Mayon and stop Asuang before he finally controls the other deities and gain the favor of the evil gods. --- Cliche as it may seems, what do you think of the Game World and Game Story?

I have been writing this game story a year ago and I have been thinking what could have been the drawbacks or something I should have changed over the past year I have been storyboarding it. Anyways, I'll post it here: The Game World The game consists of 4 Kingdoms and 1 Great Nation where each faces a problem in their Politics, Social Welfare, Culture and Philosophy. They are in peace with each other and currently decided to make the peace talk into a treaty, called the Treaty of Sofia. Each Kingdom also has their own distinct and unique kinds of fighting styles, martial languages and abilities. Great Nation of Marianess About The Great Nation of Marianess is the Central Kingdom of all the 4 Neighboring Kingdoms (Stolka, Tasaria, Kaleisha and Monoleva). Long before the Kingdoms came into peace, King Rou and Queen Adelfa of Marianess suggested peace and ordered a treaty. Tired of turmoil and unending battle towards each other, the 4 Kingdoms agreed. Queen Adelfa kept the Treaty of Sofia under strict guard and hired the strongest fighters in each of the Kingdom to guard it. The four great warriors of the four kingdoms are called the ‘Four Avatars of the Great Nation of Marianess’. They Great Nation existed to see balance over the four kingdoms and ensure peace. Trade, Communication, Politics, Physical, Social, Spiritual and Emotional Issues are being tackled by the Great Nation to make sure that everything is at peace and no war will break out. The current ruler Princess Mirai of the Great Nation of Marianess is facing the greatest fear of her time as a ruler. She heard that Prince Eric of Kaleisha has created a faction in the intent of killing his own mother. Mirai orders the third avatar Annaline of Kaleisha to secure that her homeland shall not fall into war. Annaline heard the news from King Jurion’s men that it was King Dietrich who plotted this all along to start a war. Annaline goes back to Marianess to report this, but later killed by an unknown Talisman User. King Jurion thinks that the Talisman User might be ‘Kalim Knightress’, Jurion’s childhood friend. Roles The player will take the role of a Marianess Elite Soldier ordered by Princess Mirai to investigate the death of Annaline. The player will not be able to use weapon skills, talisman nor magic but rather depends on the items Princess Mirai will give called the “Artifacts of Marianessâ€. These artifacts contain enough number to support the player’s expedition. The player must also find the Talisman User who killed Annaline and deliver the assassin back to Marianess. Stolka About The people Kingdom of Stolka are once, according to their history, barbarians and blacksmiths. After the war with the people of Tasaria, Stolkan people decided to harness their skills as blacksmiths and thus mastering the different weapons of the world. They also later on invented weapon styles, skills and designs that later gave them the reputation and title as the ‘Best Blacksmiths Kingdom’. Stolka is facing a problem about their current Kingdom’s status, as a group of Barbarian and Magic Users kidnapped Princess Parissa of Stolka in exchange of abolishing the ‘Sentry Guild’ that according to the rebels, killed their families, as well as the execution of the King of Stolka who is rumored to be the mastermind of these killings. Because of their barbaric race, Stolkan people are non-magic / talisman users. Classes The Kingdom of Stolka has the following warrior classes and unique skills: • Guardian – The Guardians are Axe Users. They are purely strong and invincible in battle due to their powerful attacks and high survivability. • Hunter – The Hunters are invincible blade warriors. They believe in balance and order, thus practicing overall balance on their fighting status. Unlike the Guardians and Lancers, Hunters has the lowest initial battle survivability (HP). • Lancer – The Lancers are war masters. Because of their wide knowledge in war strategies, they are invincible both in individual and group combats. The Lancer skills focus on individual or grouped targets which allow them to finish a group of enemies with their powerful blows. • Deathstalker – The Deathstalkers are Mace / Club weapon users. They focus on power, speed and the total domination over their enemies. King Uenoss of Stolka is a Deathstalker. Martial Language A Stolkan warrior bears one martial language that shows their Stolkan Pride and Symbol: “My power is absolute, My weapon skills are ultimate, The power of my skills is undefeated!†Roles: The player chooses his/her role as a Stolkan. Because of Stolka’s present problem, the player can either play as the hero and stop the rebels from killing the King and rescue Princess Parissa or help the rebels on their mission and be the new ruler of Stolka. Tasaria About The people of the Kingdom of Tasaria (Tasarians) are Talisman users. The Tasarians believe that the ultimate symbol of being a Tasarian is the ability to control nature through their talismans. Their Kingdom is facing poverty, as their resources are sliding down and their land has been dry for a long time, now preserving what is left among them. When the King of Tasaria heard that Stolka is facing a problem against their rebels, he is plotting to seize Stolka from the King. However, because of the treaty, King Dietrich of Tasaria is thinking to destroy the treaty signed by the entire Kingdom’s first rulers, attack the Great Nation of Marianess and gain overall control over the 4 Kingdoms. Classes The Kingdom of Tasaria has the following warrior classes and unique skills: • Fire Knight – The Fire Knights only uses Fire Talismans and Equipment. Their emblem is Power. • Ice Knight – The Ice Knights only uses Water / Ice Talismans and Equipment. Their emblem is Longevity. • Wind Knight – The Wind Knights only uses Wind Talismans and Equipment. Their emblem is Speed. • Earth Knight – The Earth Knights only uses Earth Talismans and Equipment. Their emblem is Defense. • Dark Knight – The Dark Knights only uses Dark Talismans and Equipment. Their emblem is Death. Martial Language A Tasarian warrior bears one martial language that shows their Tasarian Pride and Symbol: “The elements are my brothers, The nature is my sister, I am invincible, The talisman and my abilities surpass Marianess!†Roles The player chooses his/her role either to be King Dietrich’s favored warrior who would lead Marianess into destruction or a Tasarian Talisman Warrior who would lead the commoners into a separate faction and stop Dietrich before a war outbreaks.  Kaleisha The people of the Kingdom of Kaleisha (Kaleishan) are magic practitioners. Because of their practice in Nature and Dark Arts of Magic, they have been feared by both Tasaria and Stolka. Kaleisha is also the only nation that has a Weapon Shop where the items have embedded magical abilities in it. The Kaleishans believe that as they wear magical weapons with them, they will be unbeatable. After discovering that Queen Farina ordered Prince Eric’s parents to execution when he was still an infant, Prince Eric and his devoted Magic Knights created a faction of the Kingdom called ‘Guild Revenge’ where their main mission is to assassinate Queen Farina, Eric’s second mother, and claim the whole kingdom with the belief that Eric will lead whole Kaleisha to a better tomorrow. Classes The Kingdom of Kaleisha has the following warrior classes and unique skills: • Magic Knight – The Magic Knights control all forces of nature and can evocate the Basic and Advanced Magical Forms. Being a Magic Knight devotes the magic user’s Life and Mana to balance and unity. It also takes great sacrifice over human desires and Earthly doings. Because of this, only a few and selected becomes a Magic Knight. • Magic User – The Magic Users use Basic Nature Skills and Forms. They depend on their magical weapons supported by their magic to survive during battle or war. A Magic User can be promoted as a Magic Knight in the Temple of Julia, although it has been said by those who tried to become a Magic Knight that a Magic User should cast out Earthly desires in order to become a Magic Knight. After a cold war broke out among the magic users and their guilds, they created factions of magic practice, thus the Fire, Water / Ice, Earth and Wind magicians were born. • True Magic Knight – Although only mentioned in their Book of Legends, it is said that long ago, True Magic Knights existed over the lands of Kaleisha. No one has ever seen a True Magic Knight, even the Queen herself. It is said on the Book of Legends that a True Magic Knight is the strongest warrior in the whole 4 Kingdoms, as he can execute all unique skills of the 4 Kingdoms. Queen Farina is suspected to be a True Magic Knight, due to her Mystic Abilities and Magic Knight Abilities. She was once seen by a commoner practicing her skills and accidentally seen her using an Annihilation Technique. Martial Language A Kaleishan warrior bears one martial language that shows their Kaleishan Pride and Symbol: “I am devoted to magic… Magic alone gives me life and is my symbol, I am undisputed, My power has never been defeated!†Roles The player either chooses to become a hero summoned by Queen Farina to convince Prince Eric that he is wrong on his accusations, presenting the letter of Eric’s parents that disproves all rumored accusations to Farina or get the role as Prince Eric, who will lead Guild Revenge to battle and kill Queen Farina to become the new ruler of Kaleisha.  Monoleva The people of the Kingdom of Monoleva (Monolevian) are Martial Artists and Mystics. They are feared for their unique fighting methods and the use of magic. Because of this, they gained the respect over the Kingdom of Kaleisha. In fact, Queen Farina of Kaleisha and King Jurion of Monoleva are siblings. When their parents died, Farina and Jurion decided to go to separate ways and find their destined fate, thus becoming rulers of two neighbor kingdoms. When Jurion heard the accusation of Prince Eric that his sister ordered the assassination of Eric’s parents, he sent two investigators to search information if this is really true. After hearing his investigators that King Dietrich of Tasaria was the one who spread this rumor, Jurion ordered a hearing and ask Dietrich personally about this matter. King Dietrich felt that he was being accused without evidences to support it and killed Jurion’s messengers. Jurion was angered about Dietrich’s actions and is sending renowned martial artists and mystics to end Dietrich’s life as well as clear Prince Eric’s mind about what happened. Classes The Kingdom of Monoleva has the following warrior classes and unique skills: • Martial Artist – The martial artists are Katar, Claw and War Glove users. Divided into two factions namely: Hand Techniques and Annihilation Techniques. The Hand Techniques only uses the Fist as its fighting style. They can manipulate their enemies on ground level. The Annihilation Techniques focuses on Kicking Techniques which its only aim is to strike the vital points of the body, thus where its name comes from. King Jurion is both a Fist Master and a master of all the Annihilation Techniques. • Mystic – The Mystics are ordinary sword fighters. However, because of their knowledge in magic and Pharmacology, they are respected fighters who only exists in the land of Monoleva. King Jurion’s sister Queen Farina of Kaleisha was originally trained to be a mystic, but when she went into separate ways, practiced the art of magic. Martial Language A Monolevian warrior bears two martial languages that show their Monolevian Pride and Symbol: “I am invincible, My Martial Arts perfectly practiced and honed, The power of my blow has no equal!†“I am Undefeated, My Mystical Abilities exceeds all, The power of my blow and magic has no equal!†Roles The player chooses either to become a Martial Artist / Mystic summoned by King Jurion to end the life of King Dietrich and clear Prince Eric’s accusations against Farina or a Monolevian wanderer, without any mission. The wanderer can choose either to help any of the four kingdoms or get the same destiny as each given role.

A game story idea inspired from Paolo Coelho's "The Alchemist". Title: Alchemist Hunters Summary: The world is a beautiful place, humanity is filled with love, happiness and hope. But not everyone is happy with that, a group of miracle creating people who called themselves "Alchemists" has turned to their own evil ways, terrorizing the land with their Alchemy. However, this is not the main mission of these Alchemists, each of them are in the search of their Personal Treasure, which is said to be located in the Tree of Life. A good hearted Alchemist named Theos foresaw that each of the other Alchemists' greed will consume them and turn into evil just to get these treasures, thus hiring four warriors to hunt these Alchemists and assassinate them, they are called the Alchemist Hunters, namely Ainmire: The Berserker, Clara: The Martial Artist, Thray: The Swordsman and Cera: The Paladin. It was later revealed to the Alchemist Hunters that the name of the person who started the evil among the Alchemists is named "Melchizedek", a greedy King who uses the Urim andThummim stones and has been said to have used the Philosopher's Stone to achieve Immortality. Melchizedek's power is absolute and pure evil, knowing that the Alchemist Hunters would soon defeat the other Alchemist and soon go after his head, Melchizedek creates the hunters' ultimate foe: Santiago - the first Homunculus. ---- Note: THIS IS STILL AN IDEA. I need fellow developers and story writers for their games to give me a feedback about this