Need Critics

[SolarPhantom 29]

So, I'm trying to make a full body pic of a secret character in my game. (I am not going to tell your her name, any attacks or how to unlock her!)

and i need to know what i can do better. and I'm using paint.net with a mouse :/ don't have a tablet.

 

I'm gonna keep all the images up to show progress as i go along, and the hair is a fusion of the hair i drew on paper and a style i saw after searching on Google.

 

and feedback is helpful!

 

 

this was the start of my drawing

 

 

 

 

 

Younger Version

 

 

 

I think i have messed up with the arms :/

 

 

 

 

Older Version of her

 

 

Edited face

 

 

 

and for those of you who are like "OMG THEY NAKED!" i say this "GET YOUR MIND OUT OF THE GUTTER!"

Edited April 29, 2013 by SolarPhantom

[TheUnspokenMaster 0]

well, i start by saying this. DON'T USE ANIME STYLE. that style sucks! i mean seriously, that hair makes no sense whatsoever! it just looks so badly draw to, you use a chicken to draw that? draw this in comic style or more on the side of realism. cause no way in hell would i ever use that style in any of my games! I use the realistic style that all you "japanese cartoon loving larping people" seem to reject. 

 

so this sucks because the style is horrid and not even drawn well.

[IceyVampire 19]

well, i start by saying this. DON'T USE ANIME STYLE. that style sucks! i mean seriously, that hair makes no sense whatsoever! it just looks so badly draw to, you use a chicken to draw that? draw this in comic style or more on the side of realism. cause no way in hell would i ever use that style in any of my games! I use the realistic style that all you "japanese cartoon loving larping people" seem to reject. 

 

so this sucks because the style is horrid and not even drawn well.

there are plenty of games that use an anime style. if YOU think it sucks then that is a personal opinion and I dont reject doing a realistic style but doing that will take a lot of my time especially if your using a computer to draw. I really like the style that Phantom is using. Sure it needs some work but no one is perfect when they're drawing

 

Phantom this is a good job that you've done. keep up the good work and Im sure the finish product will look good.

[SolarPhantom 29]

first, I saw how rude you were on icy's post to. Dont bash on the style i use, i just want a critic that will help me improve what is wrong.

Second, I DREW THIS WITH A MOUSE, so if it sucks ohh well, dont just go around telling people they suck, give them "constructive criticism"

 

and this is for you unspoken

 

 

 

AND ITS ANIME STYLE!!!!!!

 

 

 

as for the "japanese cartoon loving larping people" remark, alot of the people here play jrpg's and wont appreciate that!

and bashing on the cartoons i watch is not what this thread is about! and btw i dont cosplay!

 

 

EDIT: ty icy

Edited April 28, 2013 by SolarPhantom

[TheUnspokenMaster 0]

Well kid, it is true that this is a bad drawing, and im sure that most people on this site agree, even if they wont post it!

you really need to grow up. i mean watching cartoons and drawing that style at 18? and a guy? im pretty sure your just some 13yr fan-girl sitting on a computer pretending to some 18yr old male. 

 

 

 

AND ITS ANIME STYLE!!!!!!

 

 

Real mature there kid. think your a bad-ass for that? well it has the opposite effect. 

the reason this country is going down the hole, fan-girls like you being shut in with a computer, thinking they can make a game and draw.

[IceyVampire 19]

Well kid, it is true that this is a bad drawing, and im sure that most people on this site agree, even if they wont post it!

you really need to grow up. i mean watching cartoons and drawing that style at 18? and a guy? im pretty sure your just some 13yr fan-girl sitting on a computer pretending to some 18yr old male. 

 

 

 

AND ITS ANIME STYLE!!!!!!

 

 

Real mature there kid. think your a bad-ass for that? well it has the opposite effect. 

the reason this country is going down the hole, fan-girls like you being shut in with a computer, thinking they can make a game and draw.

the drawing itself is not bad and Phantom is not even finish with it. at least most people would express their opinions in a respectable way while you have only been rude and downgrading his art. if this is not a style you like then your critiquing is obvious bias from your dislike of anime. i suggest you dont comment on anything like this if your behavior is rude like this

[RetroExcellent 369]

I'll have to ask you to stop insulting people, TheUnspokenMaster. Criticism is one thing, but you are down right flaming. Consider this your verbal warning, which is all you will get as you just created today and are already being this rude.

[SolarPhantom 29]

i now have an updated drawing, she has non-colored eyes and half her body :3 i think i did good.

 

EDIT: I have added a drawing of her at an older age!

which one is better?

(im still doing both!)

Edited April 28, 2013 by SolarPhantom

[+ Dark Influence 251]

@SolarPhantom

 

Art! Wonderful, I like it regardless of how other people view it because I can appreciate art of any style or skill 'level'.

 

Anyway, obviously it needs more work but it's still good even in its starting stages - The promise this has is quite evident and I know you can turn it into something magnificent!

 

I'm quite curious to see how this will develop and take shape, I wish you good luck with this Solar.

[Radiant Arin 412]

That actually looks quite nice. It reminds me of Sophia from Star Ocean 3, with the huge bulging eyes and long hair.

[charlesthehurst 691]

You used Paint.net for this?!  Damn, I feel so jealous of your drawing power right now.  In all seriousness though, this is a good start and definitely has potential to be a great image.

 

Conitnue the good work.

[Ritsukou 205]

well, i start by saying this. DON'T USE ANIME STYLE. that style sucks! i mean seriously, that hair makes no sense whatsoever! it just looks so badly draw to, you use a chicken to draw that? draw this in comic style or more on the side of realism. cause no way in hell would i ever use that style in any of my games! I use the realistic style that all you "japanese cartoon loving larping people" seem to reject. 

 

so this sucks because the style is horrid and not even drawn well.

He needs critics not insult dude. If dont like anime style, no body tells you to like it. Do your own art and respect peoples.

Im saying this because.

 

1. Anime is my Style, 2D or 3D

2. Hes drawing is not bad. actually its good.

3. I dont do So much western hahaha!

[SolarPhantom 29]

@SolarPhantom

 

Art! Wonderful, I like it regardless of how other people view it because I can appreciate art of any style or skill 'level'.

 

Anyway, obviously it needs more work but it's still good even in its starting stages - The promise this has is quite evident and I know you can turn it into something magnificent!

 

I'm quite curious to see how this will develop and take shape, I wish you good luck with this Solar.

:3 ty, and i have no idea how this will turn out in the end, so its gonna surprise me too. and im saving like every 6 minutes just in case my computer gets unplugged!

 

 

You used Paint.net for this?!  Damn, I feel so jealous of your drawing power right now.  In all seriousness though, this is a good start and definitely has potential to be a great image.

 

Conitnue the good work.

It hopefully will be a great image. and someday, it might not take me a century to finish one on the computer lol.

 

 

 

 

I have added new  updates of them, and im gonna finish the older version of her first, i edited the face to make it look more mature and i need an opinion on the eyes, should they stay the same or should i changed them to the eyes in the second picture?

[GreatRyukage 1]

Dem hips ._. (No, I like hips. So that's a compliment!) How long does such a piece usually take for you to complete? I can't wait to see the finished work.

[SolarPhantom 29]

well, this is my first time drawing on a computer, so i have no idea how long :/

[Radiant Arin 412]

Arms will probably be a hard thing to draw, won't it? O.o Either that, or the finite details. But anyway, keep up the good work. I wish I could draw like that.

[Darkanine 116]

I like it so far,what are the plans on the coloring of of it though?

[Dark Horseman 93]

I'll try to give you some specific feedback. If it's a style choice, you can disregard, but here's a few things I've noticed.

 

After you made the eyes less open, the face structure seemed to be off somewhat. I believe it's because the cheeks suddenly appeared much thinner (the slopes of the cheek are too steep). This is sort of what I mean:

 

 

 

When you made the eyes less chibi, there is less suspension of disbelief, and the face structure has to look a little more realistic. I think your adult version looks a little gaunt (skeletal) in the face. Also, for the nostrils, you use a dot, but I feel it's better to use either a line or very small nostrils like in the picture - 2 small curves that are barely noticeable. If there's a dot, I feel like I'm imagining a pixel on my screen or spec of dust shouldn't be there.

 

For the pelvic region, it's really odd how vulva is so distinct and sticks out. It's sort of offsetting (camel toe), so what I normally do is refer to how jeans look when making clothes: google jeans. You'll notice that the jeans come together slightly below the vulva, and there are folds/wrinkles around that instead.

 

Also, have you considered drawing your character at an angle instead of facing forward? It gives your characters a lot more depth, dynamics, and originality just being seen at an angle, albeit it's much harder to draw. Anyway, not bashing your drawing at all - it's better than my first few digital artworks. I'm actually quite impressed by the hair you drew (was it a brush, though?) and body proportions which I still have trouble with now.

[SolarPhantom 29]

the bottom anatomy isnt being messed with yet cause im still on the top half of the body. i cant do what a lot of people do and focus the whole thing.

 

and the reason she is looking forward, is because she is supposed to be looking at you

Edited April 29, 2013 by SolarPhantom

[Dalhan 2]

You need to fix the height of the hips and base of the groin. 

 

Place your thumbs on your hip bone and then measure the distance between the base of your groin (Not your tackle, but the spacing between your thighs). You can use that as a rough ratio (Keep in mind some people are different). The hips shouldn't be in line with the groin.

 

Other than that, the younger girls outline of the armpits is too high. Normally we have a sort of 'webbing" (<- quote marks, don't have a better explanation) that hides just how thin the joint is. But it shouldn't be so thin as it looks like the arm may have been stitched on. 

 

What I suggest though, is to start again. It may say like the apocalypse to you, but what you'll find is that your quality of work dramatically increases! 

 

Good luck!

[+ OmegaDSX 8]

Hay nice start,  I would soften her jaw alittle, Maybe make it more oval than square, (depends what style of anime your going for i guess)  But i usually consider those types of jaw lines for Men .  Hard to comment on the hair without any body reference although the left side seems a little thin where it comes down. Hair weights hard to figure out with out reference for body placement etc though , so see how it is when thats done.  So far so good  

[rapture 3]

you should tell us something about in what situation this pic will appear. The drawing point is first of all personal and secondly it look, beeing objective, so cool, clean and "well finished". Proportion is good enough (maybe the legs looks a kinda weird but still good).

 

but the position seems will be too much static. telling nothing about her or what is she doing/thinking. Its just a draw of her which tells you she is pretty and happy. nothing more.

 

Try to use visual way to tell things about her and give her personallity and to result a "usefull" reason showing the pic to the player

 

For the other side, if its just a "presentation" pic and will be more after it. This is so good start

 

keep working on it.

Edited June 6, 2013 by rapture

[Tsarmina 2,612]

I really like her hair, unrealistic or not. No offense, of course. The curls are amazing for done with a mouse! I think the eyes could be a little less tall, and curve around the outside of the eyes. It was done fairly well