A Girl and her Familiar(Introductory Demo Release V1.2)

[SKy_Clemens 1]

Looks so cool!! Im really interested in the element system. Can't wait until the next demo!  

[Choco-Elliot Wyvern 25]

Hello everyone~

 

Development has been VERY slow but things are starting to pick up a bit again since I've finished with exams. I rewrote the story synopsis of the game again XD Which is good because the previous one was rushed and didn't really give any idea of the story of the game. Hopefully this is the last time I change it -.-(I have a tendency of changing things so~ I doubt it). I've also recently commissioned a friend of mine to do portraits for the game I'll be posting some examples as soon as she has them done, if anyone's interested here is her shop ^^, on the topic of characters, the two twin characters have sadly been scrapped, I just don't feel like they really belonged in the story =/ So I'll be editing the character page in a few. Not sure if I'll be adding two characters in their place but we'll see ^^ and lastly I've been messing around more with art and bought myself a tablet Here are some designs for two characters, Valencia and a new character replacing the twins, Argia(me and my name choices o.O)

I'm still a beginner when it comes to art so it's still a pretty simple style I'm utilizing but yeah

[Choco-Elliot Wyvern 25]

Small update this time around:

 

I finally updated the look of the topic a bit, mostly the names of the categories and I also finally added a setting section(which I wrote really quickly >.<). And for those who are wandering I'm currently mostly working on finishing cutscenes since that's the one thing I haven't given a lot of attention to

[The Second 16]

Just finished you demo; thought I'd give you my thoughts on it.

 

You main character is the perfect image of a spoiled brat; her mother, the long suffering, and very weak willed, single mother.  So far, so good, as far as character development goes.  Not really much more I can add, sadly.

 

About the aesthetics, when transferring between areas, the BGM suddenly changes.  Nothing wrong with that, really, but I think it might be more pleasing to the ear if the BGM faded out/in when changing areas.  Also, some of the BGM loops pause for a brief instant at the end.  I do like the BGMs, however.  Also, the mapping is well done; I thought the maps were a bit crowded with small obstacles at first, until the jumping mini-tutorial, that is.

 

Also,I really like the 'In Between world'.  Very remeniscent of the Celestial World of SaGa 2.  Hopefully there will be more of it in the full game?

 

Regarding cut scenes, In the cut scene outside the house, I expected the cat to meow, purr, or something.  Not a major thing, but it would add to his (her?) personality.

 

And finally, grammar and formatting.

 

In the cut scene outside the house, we are presented with this sentence:

 

"So <cat name> are you OK?I'ts..."

 

The preceding text should probably read, "So, <cat name>, are you OK? It's...".  In fact, many dialogues suffer from a lack of commas and from formatting errors.  

 

I'd really like to see more of this game, perhaps a longer demo, with an example of the battle system.  I did enjoy the (very) little I was able to play, however, and wish you luck with development.

Edited November 24, 2013 by The Second

[Paprika 2]

Jer ti priÄaÅ¡ hrvatski?

Jer vatra i priroda su hrvatske rjeÄi.

[J0pac 20]

Jer ti priÄaÅ¡ hrvatski?

Jer vatra i priroda su hrvatske rjeÄi.

Translate:Do you speak Croatian since "vatra" and "priroda" are Croatian words for fire and nature.

 

Anyway I liked the demo ,though as everyone already said the demo is quite short and you can't really give much feedbacks on what

we've seen in demo.The maps are decent and I like main characters personality.

 

As for grammar I'm the last person who should criticize you about that since english is not my native language and as you've probably figured out by reading this my grammer sucks too.

 

P.S let me know if you're from Croatia

Edited March 9, 2014 by J0pac

[kaz 1,338]

Jer ti pričaš hrvatski?

Jer vatra i priroda su hrvatske rječi.

english only on this forum please