Saiffu 26 Posted September 4, 2013 (edited) Edited October 14, 2013 by Saif Ü Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Ocedic 249 Posted September 4, 2013 Nice presentation, though I would suggest widening the images. It feels too condensed right now and a bit hard to read; there's a lot of screen space available horizontally. One thing that could be improved is grammar and spelling. For example, under Resources Used, you write "There are no artworks which excell in this game, only a few was shown..." which should read "There is no artwork that excels in this game; only a few are shown..." Not trying to be pedantic, but spelling and grammar are definitely things that are important when presenting something as professional writing. Otherwise, I'm glad to see you invest a lot of time and effort into your reviews. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Chigoo 38 Posted September 4, 2013 (edited) Nice, review. I will fix some of the issues mentioned, mainly the bugs. For the story I like it the way it is because it's a dream, and in dreams you don't really know what's going on and most of the times there's no reason for your dream, or what you're doing in it. It's just there, and you're experiencing it. I will however take your advice to make the pages tell the story when I make Part 2 of this game, Where death follows you to the real world. Another things I really have no control over, well at least I don't think I do is the event not running when you're interacting with another event. And I will definitely add the picture for when death appears. Also the screen shaking is actually telling you when death is near, but I can see how it could be annoying, I'll try to change that. Finally as for the mini map, I will not be adding one, I want the player to be lost It's all part of the gameplay, but I will add the map to the game's folder where it would be available to everyone who downloads the game. The map isn't really there to guide you although it does. Almost forgot the health is for hard mode where death's minions try to slow you down they will do dmg to you, but death kills at the touch. Edited September 4, 2013 by Chigoo Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Saiffu 26 Posted September 4, 2013 @Ocedic, About the grammar and spelling, I dont usually create mistakes but I see that one now. I only noticed it now, I did the review around 1AM so my mind would have not been processing properly. and for the ' ; ' sign, I do not usually use it but I would try to train myself to learn using it. Thank you Ocedic and I shall do everything you suggested on my next review. ) Thank you again so much and I shall invest time reading your reviews so that I would improve. I have read almost every review you have on the forum and all I can say is that you construct your sentences perfectly and neatly. I shall learn that >) @Chigoo, I would be waiting for your next update then. Good luck and again, happy game making! Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
