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D'eux: Sleepless Angels [feat. Scarlette]

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Thanks all for your critics! I did what some of you have suggested and they look better than I could of imagine. Only thing is, I still suck at coloring and shadings--even my teacher had to admit that my coloring style needs more improving--which I would doubt since I never liked coloring in the first place, lol..

These characters are all W.I.P (work in progress) and I may want someone else to try and color them for me instead.

Daeron-wip_zps33d33964.pngMargaux-wip_zps4c6c36b0.pngRyutaro-wip_zpsa0b4efbc.pngnonameyet-wip_zps09efa7ae.png
Previous characters :3


 


WARNING! 

The image you are about to see is SUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUPER sexy, click spoiler at your own risk.

 

Gentlemen please keep your pants on.

 

Scarlette_zps2617966b.png

 

Introducing the uber sexy barkeep and hostess Scarlette... just Scarlette. She is a very enigmatic character and plays a very important role in my plot. Like any barkeeper she is very useful when it comes to giving information but with a price of course!

 

I wasn't really planning on introducing Scarlette until her coloring was done, but my colorist isn't available until next Wednesday--and with my erratic work schedule I don't know when I'll be able to update again, so I thought why not now? What do you guys think about her? Especially the good gentlemen of this community? Is she sexy enough for you?

 

There is also something reaaaaaaaaaaaally special about her but let's save it for later.

 

Now bow down before her beauty!

 

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That's pretty damn good! I wish I could do that but I'm not even going to try, I know my own limits.

 

That blinking is actually rather annoying to me, it's fine to have it blink but not that often. < This is the only critique I can offer unfortunately.

 

Anyway, I wish I could point out issues with it but it's for the most part too high up in terms of skill for me to critique if that makes any sense, still it's very good work so you have my praise at least.

 

Keep up the awesome work!

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Thank you :)

 

The actual faceset doesn't actually blink in the actual game, I just made him blink to make him more... real? haha

 

Sorry if the blinking annoyed you.

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Actually, I think it'd be really cool if in the game you used him as a portrait (Galv's script is AWESOME, but I don't think it works with animations), that he can blink. Maybe not that often, and his eyes are closed a little too long to make it seems natural as possible, but those are easy to fix. :) I think blinking is a great way to make the game unconsciously more active, so I think, if you can manage it, it's a great idea!

Also a great picture overall. :) The shading on his skin could use some variety, but he's lovely!

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Actually, I think it'd be really cool if in the game you used him as a portrait (Galv's script is AWESOME, but I don't think it works with animations), that he can blink. Maybe not that often, and his eyes are closed a little too long to make it seems natural as possible, but those are easy to fix. :) I think blinking is a great way to make the game unconsciously more active, so I think, if you can manage it, it's a great idea!

Also a great picture overall. :) The shading on his skin could use some variety, but he's lovely!

The blinking is not actually the default animation, lol.. Its just something I did to display my work--since I did mention in my introduction (I'll assume you've read my introduction thread in "Introductions and Farewells") that I am unconventional, lol. The only reason for the blinking to be awkwardly animated like that is because I need to match the "walking" of the character sprite, if that made sense. Initially, Daeron wouldn't be blinking and the only animation would be the walking sprite--but since I am unconventional, I made him blink.

 

Hm, I'm not really good at manipulating scripts unfortunately--I only was able to master one or two for now, since I still find most scripts complicatingly hard to understand but I am trying, now I am interested in what scrpit is that you've meant, mind linking it to me?

 

Strange, the shading on his face was close to perfect in my computer--the brightness and contrast must be off in mine, I shall recolor his lovely face again to make him more appealing, thank you for pointing that out for me.

 

And thank you overall. :)

 

Oh god... centered text.

He looks amazing though, good job. ^^

I take it you're not a fan of centered text, lol. I shall try to avoid it next time. ^^

Thank you very much, I like that fact that you liked him. :)

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Wow that is a very lovely portrait, I really like it. I think his sprite is exceptionally sharp. The left side of his hair where the little strands come out look a little blurry maybe due to how small the strands are. Maybe make them just a wee little bit bigger, or darken it a bit so it appears less blurry. Other then that I can give no critique and only say that you did quite a nice job on the entire design of this character :) he is quite handsome, and has a very pro suit as well..

 

I personally don't mind centered text, I think it's easy to read and I use it :P everyone's preference is different.

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@Everyone, thank you all for such wonderful feedbacks on Daeron. :3

 

@Tsarmina: Thank you! I'll be sure to PM you when I have any problems. :3

 

I don't know how to edit the title :(

 

Here is another portrait of my current project--took a little break from mapping and decided to work on it while I don't have any inspiration or idea on how I should map a particular area, so for the meantime, here is Margaux (MAR-GO).

A little bit about here is that she is the main protagonist of my game and she is Daeron's twin older sister.

 

Margaux_zpsa405a40b.pngMargaux-2_zpsbf70694b.png

 

I want to know though, which is much better? Her eyes sticking out of her fringe or hiding behind it? I look forward on your feedbacks.

 

Also, I'm sorry about the map incident. I wasn't really aware of it, truly. :(

I've respected your decision and have deleted the link.

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for me it would be the one where the eyes sticking out.

It seems to show a little more of the bust picture.

I dont know, I personally prefer the one where the eyes are sticking out. :)

I feel more comfortable looking at it more than the one where it does not show.

I feel this disturbance whenever I compare the two. xD

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What if I had colored the eyes in, will it help in finalizing the decision? :)

 

Margaux_zps4bc2c0c4.png

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I feel the same since I am also attached to the eyes sticking out then the one hidden.

 

Thank you!

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I personally prefer the one whose eye is partially hidden, when you can see things through bangs in manga it always disturbs me x) (is the eye like gauged out or is her hair translucid ?)

 

Great line art (even though I find it a bit too conventionnal it's by far the best I've seen on RM communities and no booby-melons !!!), colouring lacks a bit of shadding (in the second it's normal I think but the face of the first looks a bit flat) but the overall is real good.

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Daeron's pretty sexy o3o.

(Bishie Lover here)

Your art style is excellent as well XD I like it.

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@Riff - I see, it'll be awhile before I introduce my project so there maybe changes with the current art and coloring--i actually redrew and recolored Daeron. Lol

 

@Cecillia - yes! A fellow bishie lover! Expect more bishi's to come cause I plan to draw more. *^*b

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Ooh! Haven't checked this in a while (one of my fave topics :D) and I'm glad to see a new character. She's very pretty (though I have to say, I prefer Daeron ^^) I think her right eye--right being from my perspective--seems to almost tilt up; it's a little off-putting because it looks a bit like either her cheekbones push quite high (which is possible) or one side of her face dimples slightly (which is also possible...). Sorry if I'm not making sense. ^^"

I like her with the eyelashes shown, but with the eyebrow covered, actually. It provides a sense of more fullness without being quite so...transparent...

Yeah, I'm not making sense. ^^

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I think her right eye--right being from my perspective--seems to almost tilt up; it's a little off-putting because it looks a bit like either her cheekbones push quite high (which is possible) or one side of her face dimples slightly (which is also possible...). Sorry if I'm not making sense. ^^

Its because she is tilting her head-- like when you do when you have a secret but you wouldn't tell them what. Lol

 

I like her with the eyelashes shown, but with the eyebrow covered, actually. It provides a sense of more fullness without being quite so...transparent...

Yeah, I'm not making sense. ^^

I actually tried it and she looks better this way! Thank you very much for that~

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Ryutaro is so freaking hot.

I know right? He can't be a lady's man if he isn't hot~

Glad you liked him. XDD

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