Game improvements?

[ShySquishie11 0]

Kon'nichiwa! ( ´ â–½ ` )ﾉ I was wondering... do I need improvements on my game? It's only just been started, and I have no title screen or name yet,  so I just wanted to see your comments on how I could improve a bit?  

[Mr. Detective 5]

Yeah, you might want to post more information about the game. Those screenshots are pretty identical, and there's not much I could tell you at this moment. Having said that, the room is a bit to spacious and bland. You should either shrink it, or fill it up with some items.

[Mei 78]

Here I go...

 

Second Screen - It may just be me, but don't you think that that one book in the middle of the two bookshelfes looks a bit out of place? Overall it looks a bit bland, but maybe that's just how the character wants it. I dunno.

 

Last Screen - Looks nice, but that bottle of beer looks like it's floating. And the beer looks a bit out of place too. I personally won't leave it in the middle of a hallway. Again, maybe that's how it's supposed to be.

 

I agree with Mr. Detective, a bit of information about the game would be nice.

[+ Brackev 66]

Piper is mentioned too many times by name. How about some "She" and "her" or maybe just cut a few out.

[ShySquishie11 0]

Thanks guys ^^

 

 

And sorry for not giving much info. ( ^ .. ^'');

Well, the story is about a girl who lives with her sister (Piper). The live near the woods so they hunt and cook the things they catch. Their parents died when they were young, and they can't remember how. The were told they died hunting.

I don't want to spoil any of the events though, sorry. ^^

[Tsarmina 2,612]

Try not to double post I merged them for you.

 

The mapping is pretty good. I would also consider giving your windowskin a change--a change, not a color swap ^^ It can add a whole different ambiance to your game.

[dinhbat3 57]

Hi Squishie

 

Great start to your project =D My only addition to the comments so far would be about the checklist.

 

When writing a To Do List. People don't generally elaborate on "why" they need to do something. They just put down "what" they need to do.

 

1. Hunt with Piper - Bring Plasters and Bandages

2. Pack - Don't forget toothbrush!

3. Special farewell dinner

4. Sleep early.

 

Then when these things happen, you can explain the rest. For number 1 for instance. Have the player go to the shelf to get the bandages. Have the actor say something that explains why you need the bandages. "Piper told me it could get dangerous, so I should make sure to bring these bandages."

 

Anyways, that was just my thoughts. Hope that was helpful =D Goodluck!

 

~ Dinhbat

[GreatswordGames 2]

Is this based of William the unpro pros horror game guide?

It seems very similar. The mapping is very nice though even if it is simple.