Literature -A small piece from a work in progress...

[Nestat 80]

Here's a small piece of a... well, writing of mine that i'm working on.

 

Your comments and/or corrections are as always very welcome

                                                                                                                                                                    

 

Some rainy Monday i read in a tiny piece of paper an explanation written down with only two words. I froze.

I didn't expected from her to end a lifetime with only two words; I started searching the streets in the darkness...

On Tuesday i'm still looking for her, i wanted to say angrily to her that two little words in a tiny piece of paper

aren't enough; but i couldn't control my wounded ego and at the sunset the first tears came into my eyes...

Wednesday. The sun has risen, but the earth stands still for me. Two days now i'm looking desperately for her.

The phone doesn't ring, i don't know where she might be, what is is this all about;... Suddenly i'm completely lost...

On Thursday i cannot take it any more.. I return totally beaten at home to get some sleep. I open the door and

see her right in front of me, smiling...
"Baby" she said, "i was here the whole time. I just wanted to see how much your little heart cared for me"

 

Edited March 24, 2015 by Nestat

[Horror Friend 21]

Thats good!

[Nestat 80]

Thanks, my Horror Friend

[Point08 219]

I know you said this is from something you're working on, but if you remove the last three lines, I actually think this works a short stand-alone piece as well.